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What are some good things or bad things about having a computer?

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In Good thing, it is comfortable to do anything. Doing homework, finding materials and making Power Point are examples. In bad thing, It can be used too much. Playing games, watching something and chatting get included.

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Hello Rachel!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


In Good thing, it is comfortable to do anything. 

>> The good thing is it is comfortable to use when doing anything. 

Doing homework, finding materials and making Power Point are examples. 

>> Doing homework, finding materials, and making a Power Point are some examples. 

In bad thing, It can be used too much. 

>> The bad thing is it can be used too much.

Playing games, watching something and chatting get included.

>> Playing games, watching something, and chatting are some examples.

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