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Which famous celebrity influenced you the most and why?

Heung-Min Son is the most influential celebrity to me. He is the one of the most famous soccer player in the world. His game always makes me to expect. Whenever he scores in his game, I'm always proud of him. He has enhanced national prestige since he made his debut.

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Hi Won:)

I heard that he is a phenomenal soccer player. I hope he can inspire more people to love soccer too! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Heung-Min Son is the most influential celebrity to me. 
>> CORRECT

He is the one of the most famous soccer player in the world. 
>> CORRECT

His game always makes me to expect. 
>> His games always make me expect something good. 

Whenever he scores in his game, I'm always proud of him. 
>> Whenever he gets a score in his game, I feel proud of him. 

He has enhanced national prestige since he made his debut.
>> He has enhanced the national prestige since he made his debut.

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