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The best thing when we take online class

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I think the best thing of online class is comfortable to take. We can take class in home easily. We don't have to go to school. We can save times that go to the school, and we don't have to prepare a lot to our appearance. And I think we have more time to study alone. Frankly, I don't like the public class. These days, I don't take the exam, and the lesson is too easy. Teachers don't give a hard questions. I don't know why, but laws say that 'Public lessons have to be easy.' That's why I hate public education. Students can't develop with only public educations. Because there are not hard problem, students who depend on public education can't be Top of the Top. However, we can find the best way to study if we study alone. We can also study very hard problem freely. So I prefer online class because the times that study alone is increased.

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Hi, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework!

 

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- Teacher Debbie

I think the best thing of online class is comfortable to take. 
>> I think the best thing about taking an online class is that it is comfortable.

We can take class in home easily. 
>> We can easily have it at home.

We don't have to go to school. 
>> This is a good sentence.

We can save times that go to the school, and we don't have to prepare a lot to our appearance. 
>> We can save commute time, and we don't have to prepare a lot for our appearance.

And I think we have more time to study alone.
>> In addition, we have more time to study alone.

Frankly, I don't like the public class.
>> Frankly, I don't like face-to-face classes.

 These days, I don't take the exam, and the lesson is too easy. 
>> These days, I don't take exams, and the lessons are too easy. 

Teachers don't give a hard questions.
>> Teachers don't give hard questions.

I don't know why, but laws say that 'Public lessons have to be easy.' 
>> I don't know why, but laws say, " Public school lessons have to be easy."

That's why I hate public education. 
>> This is a good sentence.

Students can't develop with only public educations.
>>Students can't develop only with public education.

Because there are not hard problem, students who depend on public education can't be Top of the Top. 
>> Because the problems are not challenging, public school students can't be on top.

However, we can find the best way to study if we study alone.
>> This is a good sentence.

 We can also study very hard problem freely. 
>> We can freely study challenging problems.

So I prefer online class because the times that study alone is increased.
>> I prefer online classes because I can have more time to study alone.
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