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Who's your favorite hero?
My favorite hero is spieder man. He's name is Peter Parker young, so he is little not ready for the hero. But he is learning, how to be a great hero. When He catchs some villians he says some jokes to the police officers. It's fun when spieder man says some jokes. One of his joke "Don't says another joke about this basement, spieder man!" police officer said "I'm not doing any basement jokes they are all beneath me." He is funny. When he want's to give up? Than he thinks his uncle, Ben Parker. Uncle Ben likes to gives some one hope and remind us that we shoud always have. One of his great sentence: "Great power comes great responsibility." He's dead now, but spider man thinks of him and have hopes.
What magical powers do you want to have?
I want to have magical power's like Doctor strange. He has lot's of magic powers and It's very cool. My third best hero is Doctor strange.
(second is Iorn man He's very cool too.) He's magical powers are very intresting.

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Hi Seung Ju, 
 A superhero is a person who does heroic deeds and has the ability to do them in a way that a normal person couldn't. So in order to be a superhero, you need a power that is more exceptional than any power a normal human being could possess, and you need to use that power to accomplish good deeds. Always be strong.  ~ Teacher QUENNY..

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Who's your favorite hero?
>> Who's your favorite hero? (CORRECT). 
My favorite hero is spieder man. He's name is Peter Parker young, so he is little not ready for the hero. But he is learning, how to be a great hero.
>> My favorite hero is Spiderman. His name is Peter Parker. He's young so he is not quite ready to be a hero but he trained himself and learned how to be a great hero. 
 When He catchs some villians he says some jokes to the police officers. 
>> When he catches some villains he cracks r tells some jokes to the police officers. 
It's fun when spieder man says some jokes.
>> It's fun when Spider-man tells some jokes. 
 One of his joke "Don't says another joke about this basement, spieder man!" police officer said "I'm not doing any basement jokes they are all beneath me." 
>> One of his jokes "Don't say another joke about this basement, Spider-man!" police officer said, "I'm not doing any basement jokes they are all beneath me." 
He is funny. When he want's to give up? Than he thinks his uncle, Ben Parker. 
>> He is funny. When he wants to give up, he thinks of his uncle, Ben Parker. 
Uncle Ben likes to gives some one hope and remind us that we shoud always have. 
>> Uncle Ben likes to give someone hope and remind us that we should always be hopeful. 
One of his great sentence: "Great power comes great responsibility." He's dead now, but spider man thinks of him and have hopes.
>> One of his great sentences: "Great power comes with a great responsibility." He's dead now, but every time Spider-man thinks of him and he always has hopes.
What magical powers do you want to have?
>> What magical powers do you want to have?(Correct)
I want to have magical power's like Doctor strange.  
>> I want to have magical powers like Doctor Strange. 
He has lot's of magic powers and It's very cool.
>> He has lots of magic powers and it's very cool. 
My third best hero is Doctor strange (second is Iorn man He's very cool too.) 
>> My second best hero is Iron man because he's very cool too. And the third-best hero is Doctor Strange. 
He's magical powers are very intresting.
>> His magical powers are very interesting.
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Who's your favorite hero?
My favorite hero is spieder man. He's name is Peter Parker young, so he is little not ready for the hero. But he is learning, how to be a great hero. When He catchs some villians he says some jokes to the police officers. It's fun when spieder man says some jokes. One of his joke "Don't says another joke about this basement, spieder man!" police officer said "I'm not doing any basement jokes they are all beneath me." He is funny. When he want's to give up? Than he thinks his uncle, Ben Parker. Uncle Ben likes to gives some one hope and remind us that we shoud always have. One of his great sentence: "Great power comes great responsibility." He's dead now, but spider man thinks of him and have hopes.
What magical powers do you want to have?
I want to have magical power's like Doctor strange. He has lot's of magic powers and It's very cool. My third best hero is Doctor strange.
(second is Iorn man He's very cool too.) He's magical powers are very intresting.
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