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Why didn\'t I do the right thing?

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Yes, I have found something that isn¡¯t mine. One case, long time ago, I got a phone at a bench in a subway station. At that time, I brought the phone to the station office. you know a phone is very expensive and has lots of information about someone. I think almost people did like me in korea.

Another case I talk when I walked alone the path in a forest lots years ago. I found money, maybe twenty dollars. I thought I could not find the real owner. so I put the money in my wallet, and then I used that for myself. I knew that was not the right thing to do.

What is different? I think there are easily two questions. one is that I can find the real owner or not. the other is that my efforts for finding the owner is worth more than that thing or not.

Anyway, I know if I find something that isn¡¯t mine, I should look for the real owner. If I can¡¯t, I should bring that to the Lost and Found Center. and then we have to be careful not to lose something.

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Hi Elliot!

Wow! This homework is awesome! As you can see, there were a lot of great sentences on this one! I can see that your last mistakes were gone!
Thank you so much for following my corrections, your essay is so much now! Please observe that you should capitalize the proper names like "Korea" and the beginning of the sentences. 

I am so happy, thank you! I can see a great improvement. 
-Teacher Violet.

Yes, I have found something that isn¡¯t mine. 
>> CORRECT!

One case, long time ago, I got a phone at a bench in a subway station. 
>> One case, a long time ago, I got a phone at a bench in a subway station. 

At that time, I brought the phone to the station office. 
>> CORRECT!

you know a phone is very expensive and has lots of information about someone. 
>> You know a phone is very expensive and has lots of information about someone. 
OR >> >> You know a phone is very expensive and has lots of information about the owner.

I think almost people did like me in korea.
>> I think most people did like me, in Korea.
OR>> I think most people in Korea did like me.
OR>> I think most Koreans did like me.

Another case I talk when I walked alone the path in a forest lots years ago. 
>> Another case, was when I talked while walking alone on a forest path (lots of) years ago. 

I found money, maybe twenty dollars. 
>> CORRECT!

I thought I could not find the real owner. so I put the money in my wallet, and then I used that for myself. 
>> CORRECT!

I knew that was not the right thing to do.
>> CORRECT!

What is different? 
>> CORRECT!

I think there are easily two questions. 
>> CORRECT!

one is that I can find the real owner or not. the other is that my efforts for finding the owner is worth more than that thing or not.
>> The first is whether I can find the real owner or not and the other is whether my effort for finding the owner is worth more than that thing or not.

Anyway, I know if I find something that isn¡¯t mine, I should look for the real owner. 
>> CORRECT!

If I can¡¯t, I should bring that to the Lost and Found Center. 
>> CORRECT!

and then we have to be careful not to lose something.
>> Finally, we have 
to be careful not to lose something. 
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