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If you could change one thing in the world, what would it be?
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The Climate Change, Russia¡¯s invasion into Ukraine, the conflicts in the Middle East, and etc. All these are the problems that we all should be interested in and try to tackle together. And I really hope that all these are solved!
However, before I tell something that I want change, I have to try to change myself to change the world.
If I want the climate issues solved, for instance, I have to separate the trash. I have to separate the trash into the waste can not be recycled, the one that can be recycled and food.

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Hi, U Seung! 

Well, indeed that is true. If we want change to happen then we should start it  ourselves. The climate change has been one of the biggest problems we have in this world and in order to heal the world, we should be doing something about it. 

Thank you for sharing and have a great night! 

~T. Roanne ^_^
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The Climate Change, Russia¡¯s invasion into Ukraine, the conflicts in the Middle East, and etc. 
>> Correct! 
All these are the problems that we all should be interested in and try to tackle together. 
>> Correct! 
And I really hope that all these are solved!
>> Correct! 
However, before I tell something that I want change, I have to try to change myself to change the world.
>> However, before I say something about what I want to change, I have to try to change myself to change the world.
If I want the climate issues solved, for instance, I have to separate the trash. 
>> Correct! 
I have to separate the trash into the waste can not be recycled, the one that can be recycled and food.
>> I have to separate the trash into the waste that cannot be recycled, the one that can be recycled and food.
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