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If you were planning a party on a very small budget, what would you do to make it a great party?

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I'm going to make food that I can make, and then I have to buy alcohol with a small budget like soju and bear. If I don't have enough a budget, I can pay with credit card. :)

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Hi Elic!
 
That sounds like a  great party with friends. 
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!'

I'm going to make food that I can make, and then I have to buy alcohol with a small budget like soju and bear. 
>> I'm going to make food that I can make and buy alcoholic beverages with a small budget, like soju and bear. 

If I don't have enough a budget, I can pay with credit card. :)
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