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If you were planning a party on a very small budget, what would you do to make it a great party?

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First, in my opinion, doing a party with parents usually makes an awkward situation.
So for me, just having a party only with my friends is more comfortable.
And also I think if I am going to have a party, I have to invite a lot of people.
Then, the people will make us to feel like in the big party.
And also I need to borrow a big place to have a big party.
But, if I am going to have a party, there are so many things to prepare.
And I don't like to prepare a lot of things, so I usually don't have a party.
And also I think just playing with my friends in outside is more interesting for me.

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Hi John!
 
Yes, having a party with friends is much better. But if you want to have a good time on a budget, playing outside is much better. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

First, in my opinion, doing a party with parents usually makes an awkward situation.
>> CORRECT

So for me, just having a party only with my friends is more comfortable.
>> CORRECT

And also I think if I am going to have a party, I have to invite a lot of people.
>> I also think that if I have a party, I have to invite a lot of people. 

Then, the people will make us to feel like in the big party.
>> Then, the people will make us to feel like were in a big party. 

And also I need to borrow a big place to have a big party.
>> I also need to borrow a big place to have a big party. 

But, if I am going to have a party, there are so many things to prepare.
>> There are also a lot of things to prepare. 

And I don't like to prepare a lot of things, so I usually don't have a party.
>> I don't like to prepare a lot of things, so I usually don't have a party.

And also I think just playing with my friends in outside is more interesting for me.
>> I just like playing with my friends outside. It is more interesting for me. 
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