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Just with my friends:)

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First, I'm going to invite my best friends.
And I don't want to big party, I want just small scale party with my best friend.
Because it's fun when I with my friends every time I happy and laugh.
That it's my party.
Big music, drinking alcohol, meeting new friends it's too good but not my type.
If I can prepare my self party, I'm just hang out with my friends haha:)

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Hi Ann!
 
That's true. We don't need a lot of money to have a good time, right? It's just a matter of being with great people. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

First, I'm going to invite my best friends.
>> CORRECT

And I don't want to big party, I want just small scale party with my best friend.
>> And I don't want to have big party. I just want a small scale party with my best friends. 

Because it's fun when I with my friends every time I happy and laugh.
>> It is because it's fun. My friends make me happy and laugh. 

That it's my party.
>> That's how I will have my party. 

Big music, drinking alcohol, meeting new friends it's too good but not my type.
>> Listening to loud music, drinking alcohol, and meeting new friends can be good but not my type. 

If I can prepare my self party, I'm just hang out with my friends haha:)
>> If I can prepare my self a party, I'll just choose to hang out with my friends. Hahaha! :) 

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