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What is a perfect family for you

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In my opinion, the family whose members consider one another is the best family. I think the close relationship doesn't always make people happy. In contrast, the closer the relationship is, the more considerable we should be. In my experience, when I was young, I didn't consider the way my family feel. But as I grew up, I learned that consideration is the most important factor in dealing with others, especially the family.

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Good day Su Jin!
Thank you for allowing me to your thoughts. When we were young, we tend to focus on ourselves. But as we grow older and mature, we tend to reach out people that are important to us, we try to be more considerate on their feelings and thoughts.
Have a great day! 
T. Aki~
In my opinion, the family whose members consider one another is the best family. 
>>> Correct!
Or >>  I think a considerate family is the best for me.
I think the close relationship doesn't always make people happy. 
>>> I think having a close relationship doesn't always make people happy.
In contrast, the closer the relationship is, the more considerable we should be. 
>>> In contrast, the closer the relationship is, the more considerate we should be
In my experience, when I was young, I didn't consider the way my family feel. 
>>> Based on my experience when I was young, I didn't consider what my family feels..
But as I grew up, I learned that consideration is the most important factor in dealing with others, especially the family.
>>>  Correct!
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