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Who do you think is the best candidate for president during this election in South Korea and why?

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It's all the same candidates. Because they only show good things during the election. I don't think there was the best candidate. And in my heart, It's only Heo Gyeong Young. :)

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Hi Elic!
 
You have a point there. They always show their good side during elections. Most of them are not transparent. 

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It's all the same candidates. Because they only show good things during the election. 
>> All of the candidates are the same because they only show good traits during the election. 

I don't think there was the best candidate. 
>> I don't think there was a best candidate. 

And in my heart, It's only Heo Gyeong Young. :)
>> In my heart, the best is Heo Gyeong Young. :)
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