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Why I think late school is bad.

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I think late school is bad.
That is because when we are late at school, we have punishments.
My second reason is when we go early to school, we can do study more.
My third reason is when we are late at school, it is very shy.
Finally, being late is bad.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you so much for doing your homework.   Keep writing to improve your skills. 

- Teacher Debbie

I think late school is bad.
>> I think being late for school is bad.

That is because when we are late at school, we have punishments.  
My third reason is when we are late at school, it is very shy. Finally, being late is bad. My second reason is when we go early to school, we can do study more.
>> If we are late for school, we can get punished. It is embarrassing and awful. However, when we go to school early, we can study more.  





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