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Korea have a new president.
And he is Yoon Seok Yeoul.
My family we don't like him truly.
And we suppoerted number 1, Lee Jae Myeoung.
But I don't like him too.
Honestly,I feel just wanted to make a better choice than the worst.
I don't know now I'm penic I don't have any trust to him

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Hi Ann!

A lot of Koreans have mixed emotions about this actually. Let's just hope that he will do a great job during his term. 
 
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Korea have a new president.
>> South Korea has a new president now and he is Yoon  Seok-yeoul.

And he is Yoon Seok Yeoul.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

My family we don't like him truly.
>> Honestly, me and my family don't like him. 

And we suppoerted number 1, Lee Jae Myeoung.
>> We supported Lee Jae-myeoung. 

But I don't like him too.
>> CORRECT

Honestly,I feel just wanted to make a better choice than the worst.
>> Honestly, I just wanted to make a better choice because all of them are not good. 

I don't know now I'm penic I don't have any trust to him
>> I am panicking now because I don't trust him. 
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