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First homework : Things that make me happy.

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2022-03-11 374

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Things that make me happy.

There are many kinds of things that make me happy.
First, delicious food makes me happy.
Eating delicious food relieves stress and makes me feel better.

Second, bright friends.
My friends give me bright energy.
This is because if I meet your friends, talk, and spend time together that i can forget about the hard and sad things and have a good time. The stories that my friends tell me are encouraging and a great help.

Lastly, there are precious families.
Families are very important people to me. My family is always on my side.
I support, understand, and always take care of many things I do.
These family actions make me happy.

These many things make me happy.
Therefore, I will try to live happier.

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Good evening, Hazel! ^^
Thank you for explaining your answers in detail. Keep it up! ^^
Please check the corrections below~

- T. Rina


1. There are many kinds of things that make me happy.
>> CORRECT!

2. First, delicious food makes me happy.
>> CORRECT!
OR: Eating delicious food makes me happy.

3. Eating delicious food relieves stress and makes me feel better.
>> CORRECT!

4. Second, bright friends.
>> CORRECT!
OR: Second, having cheerful friends.

5. My friends give me bright energy.
>> CORRECT!

6. This is because if I meet your friends, talk, and spend time together that i can forget about the hard and sad things and have a good time. 
>> This is because if I meet my friends, talk and spend time with them, I can forget about the hard and sad things and have a good time.
OR: This is because I can forget my problems whenever I meet my friends.

7. The stories that my friends tell me are encouraging and a great help.
>> CORRECT!

8. Lastly, there are precious families.
>> CORRECT!

9. Families are very important people to me. 
>> CORRECT!
OR: My family is very important to me.

10.My family is always on my side.
>> CORRECT!

11. I support, understand, and always take care of many things I do.
>> They support, understand and always take care of me.
OR: They support and understand me in everything that I do.

12. These family actions make me happy.
>> CORRECT!

13. These many things make me happy.
>> CORRECT!

14. Therefore, I will try to live happier.
>> CORRECT!
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