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I love spending time in nature, but I hate insects. So I love to stay in cottage which is located in forest. There is a forest for people like me which is run by Daejeon City Government. In the forest I can lend a cottage and take some time in that. There are lots of trees which give off phytoncide. I used to go there every last day of the year when I was young, so there are lots of memories. It even can cook in there so it is a wonderful experience that eating fine dining in the nature. In spring you can feel the warmness of spring and appreciate diverse kinds of flowers, in summer you can feel the burning sunshine in cool forest which offers the shade. In fall, the forest is colored to red and yellow, in winter, you can enjoy beautiful sights made by snow. And the best thing is there are less insect than opened place like park, mountain. And you can also control the temperature of the cottage, don't nave to worry about weather condition. It must be the best experience if you visit.

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Well done, Sue! Your description of the place is outstanding. I think you can be a good writer someday! Wish you all the best!-Faith-
I love spending time in nature, but I hate insects. 
>> CORRECT
So I love to stay in cottage which is located in forest. 
>> So, I love to stay in cottage instead which is located in the forest. 
There is a forest for people like me which is run by Daejeon City Government. 
>> CORRECT
OR There is a forest for people like me which is maintained by Daejeon City Government. 
In the forest I can lend a cottage and take some time in that. 
>> In the forest, I can stay in a cottage and take some time in that. 
There are lots of trees which give off phytoncide. 
>> CORRECT
I used to go there every last day of the year when I was young, so there are lots of memories. 
>> CORRECT
OR I would go there every last day of the year when I was young, so I have many precious memories there. 
It even can cook in there so it is a wonderful experience that eating fine dining in the nature. 
>> I even could cook there so it was a wonderful experience having fine dining in the nature. 
In spring you can feel the warmness of spring and appreciate diverse kinds of flowers, in summer you can feel the burning sunshine in cool forest which offers the shade. 
>> In spring, you can feel the warmness of spring and appreciate diverse kinds of flowers and in summer, you can feel the burning sunshine in the cool forest which offers the shade. 
In fall, the forest is colored to red and yellow, in winter, you can enjoy beautiful sights made by snow. 
>> In fall, the forest is colored to red and yellow and in winter, you can enjoy beautiful sights made by snow. 
And the best thing is there are less insect than opened place like park, mountain. 
>> And the best thing is, there are less insects there than in open places like parks, mountains, etc. 
And you can also control the temperature of the cottage, don't nave to worry about weather condition. 
>> Also, you can control the temperature of the cottage, it means that you don't have to worry about weather condition. 
It must be the best experience if you visit.
>> CORRECT
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