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Do you believe in aliens? Why or why not?

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Yes, I do because universe is huge. So I think that other creatures exist in this universe. Also, there is a news which saw aliens. I think it is real. And I heard that there is a planet which is similar to the Earth. So, I believe other creatures' existence. In fact, I didn't believe any creature's existence before I see the news. I believe existence of aliens now, but I don't want to meet them in person because they are not humans and I don't know their language. So, if I meet them in person, I will run away.

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Hi Kimberly!

Me too! I have always been fascinated with space. There are so many things that we haven't discovered yet. 
 
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Yes, I do because universe is huge. 
>> 
Yes, I do because the universe is huge. 

So I think that other creatures exist in this universe. 
>> I think that there are other creatures existing in the universe. 

Also, there is a news which saw aliens. I think it is real.
>> Also, there is a news about seeing aliens. I think it is real. 

And I heard that there is a planet which is similar to the Earth. 
>> And I heard that there is a planet which is similar to Earth. 

So, I believe other creatures' existence. 
>> So, I believe that other creatures exist. 

In fact, I didn't believe any creature's existence before I see the news. 
>>> In fact, I didn't believe in it before I saw the news. 

I believe existence of aliens now, but I don't want to meet them in person because they are not humans and I don't know their language. 
>> I believe in their existence now but I don't want to meet them in person because they are not humans and I don't know how to communicate with them. 

So, if I meet them in person, I will run away.
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