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What is the advantage and disadvantage of owning a pet?

작성자: 주*빈
2022-03-13 803

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When we own a pet we can feel stable and get positive energy so we can improve mental health. Also for children, they can relieve the importance of life from owning a pet moreover the children can learn responsibility, self-reliance, and understanding. For an elderly man a pet can be a friend that they can help not be lonely or depressed. The disadvantage of owning a pet is that a pet can mess up your room and house for instance the fear will always be around your room. And the animals bark a lot and spin around the house so if not a detached house, it's hard to raise it. But I think owning a pet is a good idea because there is also quiet and clean animal like fish however all of them can give a good influence on people.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용


Hi Risa, 
Pets, especially dogs and cats can reduce stress, anxiety, and depression, ease loneliness, encourage exercise and playfulness, and even improve your cardiovascular health. Caring for an animal can help children grow up more secure and active. Pets also provide valuable companionship for older adults. The drawbacks of owning a pet are financial commitment because ownership is not cheap, time commitment because pets take time, even if it's a pet you won't socially engage with, the can destroy household if untrained and saying farewell it is never easy to say goodbye to a friend and it is especially difficult to say farewell to a pet. ~ Teacher QUENNY..

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When we own a pet we can feel stable and get positive energy so we can improve mental health. 
>> When we own a pet we can feel stable as well as secure and get positive energy so we can improve mental health. 
Also for children, they can relieve the importance of life from owning a pet moreover the children can learn responsibility, self-reliance, and understanding. 
>> Also, children can relax and relieve the importance of life from owning a pet moreover the children can learn responsibility, self-reliance, and understanding. 
For an elderly man a pet can be a friend that they can help not be lonely or depressed.
>>For adult people, a pet can be a friend that can help them relieve their loneliness and depression.
 The disadvantage of owning a pet is that a pet can mess up your room and house for instance the fear will always be around your room. 
>> The disadvantage of owning a pet is that a pet can mess up your room and house for instance the fear will always be around your room. (CORRECT) 
And the animals bark a lot and spin around the house so if not a detached house, it's hard to raise it. 
>> And the animals bark a lot and spin around the house so if not a detached house, it's hard to raise it. (CORRECT)
But I think owning a pet is a good idea because there is also quiet and clean animal like fish however all of them can give a good influence on people.
>> But I think owning a pet is a good idea because there is also quiet and clean animal like fish however not all of them can give a good influence on people. (CORRECT) 
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When we own a pet we can feel stable and get positive energy so we can improve mental health. Also for children, they can relieve the importance of life from owning a pet moreover the children can learn responsibility, self-reliance, and understanding. For an elderly man a pet can be a friend that they can help not be lonely or depressed. The disadvantage of owning a pet is that a pet can mess up your room and house for instance the fear will always be around your room. And the animals bark a lot and spin around the house so if not a detached house, it's hard to raise it. But I think owning a pet is a good idea because there is also quiet and clean animal like fish however all of them can give a good influence on people.
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