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I usually wear a suit in my company. So, I have some suits, the colors of suits are dark blue and the colors of shirts are white or sky blue. Maybe I like sky blue more than others. But I usually like the black color of the hat, the white color of the mask, and the blue color of jin.
I think people have their own favorite colors and the color is different for each item they use like me.

And if we look at it from a different side, sometimes, It is not sure if someone¡¯s favorite colors show their personality. and I heard the colors could help people¡¯s psychological problems or comfort and stability.
So, for me or others, we have to be careful in choosing colors.

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Hi Elliot!


Happy Monday. Thank you again for answering my question! Personally, I like it when people wear uniforms. It seems so classy and professional, and I like the colors you wear too!


For today's corrections, your sentences were great overall! There were just some suggestions, maybe you would like to remember "necessarily mean" which is a better form of being "equal" or "sure". There were also capitalization corrections and sentences that would have been better as one. Other than that, you did extremely well! Thank you so much for your effort and keep it up!


-Teacher Violet.


I usually wear a suit in my company. 

>> CORRECT!

So, I have some suits, the colors of suits are dark blue and the colors of shirts are white or sky blue. 

>> CORRECT!

OR >> So, I have some dark blue suits and white or sky blue shirts.


Maybe I like sky blue more than others. But I usually like the black color of the hat, the white color of the mask, and the blue color of jin.

>> Maybe I like sky blue more than others but I usually like the black color of the hat, the white color of the mask, and the blue color of jin.


I think people have their own favorite colors and the color is different for each item they use like me.

>> CORRECT!


And if we look at it from a different side, sometimes, It is not sure if someone¡¯s favorite colors show their personality. 

>> And if we look at it from a different side, sometimes, it does not necessarily mean that someone¡¯s favorite colors show their personality. 


and I heard the colors could help people¡¯s psychological problems or comfort and stability.

>> And I heard the colors could help people¡¯s psychological problems or comfort and stability.


So, for me or others, we have to be careful in choosing colors.

>> CORRECT!
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