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Do you believe in aliens? Why or why not?

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In the universe, there are so many stars and planets that we even can't count them.
And in the universe, there will be some planets that are quite similar with the earth.
And in those planets, there may be some creatures like plants or animals.
And we don't know that there may be some civilized creatures like us, humans.
Of course I couldn't know the truth of aliens.
But this universe is really huge.
So I think there would be some civilized creatures like humans, or more civilized creatures than us.

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Hi John!

I feel the same way. The world has endless possibilities. There are many things that we haven't discovered yet. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In the universe, there are so many stars and planets that we even can't count them.
>> In the universe, there are so many stars and planets that we can't even count them.

And in the universe, there will be some planets that are quite similar with the earth.
>> There are also some planets that are quite similar with Earth. 

And in those planets, there may be some creatures like plants or animals.
>> There might be different creatures in those planets. 

And we don't know that there may be some civilized creatures like us, humans.
>> We don't know if there will be civilized creatures like us, humans. 

Of course I couldn't know the truth of aliens.
>> Of course, I don't know yet if they exist. 

But this universe is really huge.
>> This universe is huge so I think there there will be different kinds of creatures in it. 

So I think there would be some civilized creatures like humans, or more civilized creatures than us.
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