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Do you agree that changes in the business and economic sector should be led by the private sector an

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2022-03-14 341

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According to the Adam Smith's theory, the government should not be intervene economic activities. He believe that there is invisible hands in the market. He argued that desirable social goals are usually reached by individuals following only their own self-interest under the arbitration of the invisible hands. He thought if people get more profits, owners will invest it to new business or hire more employees in order to produce more products but he didn't think about human's greed. Most employers wanted to reduce expenses for productions therefore they cut down wages and pushed workers to do overtime work without salary increase. It proved that government should control private businesses by the national law. Therefore, labors can be protected by their country. In addition, industries that need huge business expenses shoud be run by the government such as electricity, water and road construction. If it is led by private sectors, monthly utility fee will be increaseing continusely due

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

According to the Adam Smith's theory, the government should not be intervene economic activities.
>> According to Adam Smith's theory, the government should not intervene with the economic activities.
 He believe that there is invisible hands in the market. 
>>  He believes that there are invisible hands in the market. 
He argued that desirable social goals are usually reached by individuals following only their own self-interest under the arbitration of the invisible hands. 
>> CORRECT!
He thought if people get more profits, owners will invest it to new business or hire more employees in order to produce more products but he didn't think about human's greed. 
>> He thought if people get more profits, owners will invest it to new businesses or hire more employees in order to produce more products, but he didn't think about human's greed.
Most employers wanted to reduce expenses for productions therefore they cut down wages and pushed workers to do overtime work without salary increase. 
>> CORRECT!
It proved that government should control private businesses by the national law. 
>> CORRECT!
Therefore, labors can be protected by their country. 
>> Therefore, laborers can be protected by their country. 
In addition, industries that need huge business expenses shoud be run by the government such as electricity, water and road construction. 
>> CORRECT!
If it is led by private sectors, monthly utility fee will be increaseing continusely due
>> If it is led by private sectors, monthly utility fee will be increasing continuously.
 
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