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I'm not believe alien.
I think I wants to believe that aliens don't exist in this world.
Because I don't like any scared story.
Sometimes, when I watched TV program, they are talk about the UFO and alien topic.
and then I was very young it looks like very shocked I can't forget that feel still.

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Hi Ann!

Me too. I am scared of the fact that there are other creatures. We are not aware of what they are capable of. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I'm not believe alien.
>> I don't believe in aliens. 

I think I wants to believe that aliens don't exist in this world.
>> I think I would rather believe that they don't exist in this world. 

Because I don't like any scared story.
>> It is because I am scared of them. 

Sometimes, when I watched TV program, they are talk about the UFO and alien topic.
>> Sometimes when I watch on TV, they usually talk about UFO's and aliens. 

and then I was very young it looks like very shocked I can't forget that feel still.
>> It made me very scared when I was young and I still can't forget about it until now. 
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