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This forest fire was the worst and longest until now.
Unfortually these terrible forest fires occure in Gangwon Province every year.
To make angry me is that the cause of fire is not natural outbreak but fire prevention by mental ill man.
We can't even calculate damage and loss.
We can't predict when we will recover previous nature.

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Hello Ms. Lily!
I do appreciate your effort of responding to your written homework. Thank you for providing information with the current issue sin Korea. Same thing happened in my region four years ago, when tourist climbers accidentally set the mountain on fire because of a portable stove. Sadly, the mountain is still closed for hikers due to the tragic event.
Keep going because your effort will yield to positive results :)
Take care!
Aki~
This forest fire was the worst and longest until now.
>>> Correct!
Unfortually these terrible forest fires occure in Gangwon Province every year.
 >>> Unfortunately these terrible forest fires occur in Gangwon Province every year.
To make angry me is that the cause of fire is not natural outbreak but fire prevention by mental ill man.
 >>> What makes me angry is that the cause of the fires in not a natural outbreak but a fire created by a mentally ill man.
We can't even calculate damage and loss.
 >>> We can't even calculate the damage and losses.
We can't predict when we will recover previous nature
 >>> We can't predict when will we recover  from its previous natural appearance.

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