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Give me one big mistake that you have done and what lesson have you learned from it.

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One of my biggest mistakes is I opened the car's door in the running car.
It was a mistake but It was able to be a very big accident.
But Fortunately, I closed the car's door, and there was no any accident.
But I got shocked after it, and I learned that I have to be careful in the car.

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Hi John!

Oh dear. You should be very careful. Good thing nothing bad happened to you. That sounded scary. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

One of my biggest mistakes is I opened the car's door in the running car.
>> One of my biggest mistakes is I opened the car's door while it was running. 

It was a mistake but It was able to be a very big accident.
>> It was a mistake and I was  supposed to be in a very big accident. 

But Fortunately, I closed the car's door, and there was no any accident.
>> But fortunately I closed it immediately. 

But I got shocked after it, and I learned that I have to be careful in the car.
>> I was so shocked after it and I learned that I should be careful when I am in car. 
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