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- Life before the advent of mobile telephones may not have been convenient. However, it seems that people would have been healthier. Because there would be no mobile telephone addiction, and if bored, you would play with your friends.
- If I didn't have a mobile telephone, I would be bored and upset, but I would be happy if I lived in a world without mobile telephones.

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Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
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~ Teacher Tricia


Life before the advent of mobile telephones may not have been convenient. 
>>> CORRECT!

However, it seems that people would have been healthier. 
>>> CORRECT!

Because there would be no mobile telephone addiction, and if bored, you would play with your friends.
>>> Because there would be no mobile telephone addiction, and if boredom strikes, you would play with your friends.


If I didn't have a mobile telephone, I would be bored and upset, but I would be happy if I lived in a world without mobile telephones.
>>> CORRECT!
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