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영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
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담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

Food makes my family happy.

작성자: 김*준
2022-03-16 225

회원님의 영작문

When I read this question. For the first time, I think kimchi soup with a fork. The food is made by my wife. That makes my family happy. Secondly, I think the steak was made by my son. That’s fantastic. My son’s hobby is cooking. He is a college student and a worker of a company. He can cook very well. Especially his steak is properly thick and properly cooked. So, our family loves his cooking. What’s the important point? My son doesn’t want to pay for this food like my employees, even if he makes money. ok~~ I understand. He didn’t graduate from his studies, and then our family eats the food together, not he alone.
Unfortunately, I and my younger son are not good at cooking. So if we want to eat delicious food, I should provide some money, and my younger son should at least wash the dishes.
I think our family is very happy. So, I always thank GOD and my family

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Elliot!

Thank you for taking the time to answer this question. 
Your son seems like a lovely boy and as you said, your family seems happy. I think you all understood the importance of having a good meal together. I hope you will have more happy meals with them. For my the best food I've ever eaten is cordon bleu. I know its a very basic dish, but I still love it everytime I eat it. :)

For today's corrections, I think you mis-used some words, but other than that and a few capitalizations and punctuation corrections, I think you did really well.

This is great!
-Teacher Violet.

When I read this question. For the first time, I think kimchi soup with a fork. 
>> Do you mean: When I first read this question, I thought of kimchi soup with pork.

The food is made by my wife. 
>> CORRECT!

That makes my family happy. 
>> CORRECT!

Secondly, I think the steak was made by my son. That’s fantastic. 
>> Second, I think the steak by my son is fantastic.

My son’s hobby is cooking. 
>> CORRECT!

He is a college student and a worker of a company. 
>> CORRECT!

He can cook very well. Especially his steak is properly thick and properly cooked. 
OR >> He can cook very well, especially his steak which has a proper thickness and is well cooked.

So, our family loves his cooking. 
>> CORRECT!

What’s the important point?
>> CORRECT!

My son doesn’t want to pay for this food like my employees, even if he makes money. 
>> CORRECT!

ok~~ I understand. 
>> Ok, I understand.

      He didn’t graduate from his studies, and then our family eats the food together, not he alone.
>> He didn’t graduate from his studies, and then our family eats the food together, not him alone.

Unfortunately, I and my younger son are not good at cooking. 
>> CORRECT!
 
So if we want to eat delicious food, I should provide some money, and my younger son should at least wash the dishes.
>> CORRECT!

I think our family is very happy. 
>> CORRECT!

So, I always thank GOD and my family.
>> CORRECT!

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