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Losting My Dream Lense

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The biggest mistake I made is I lost my dream lense. I was trying to add some water in my lense bowl, but one side of my lense go through into the sink. However, it is 400,000won for each side. So I pay for it again.

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Hi Alex!

Oh, that's unfortunate. Maybe you were not able to control the water pressure. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

The biggest mistake I made is I lost my dream lense. 
>> The biggest mistake that I have made is when I lost my dream lenses. 

I was trying to add some water in my lense bowl, but one side of my lense go through into the sink. 
>> I was trying to add some water in my lenses container and one of it fell through the sink. 

However, it is 400,000won for each side. So I pay for it again.
>> It is 400,00 won each so I need to buy one again. 
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