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I can't get close to friends who are not close to me, and I, sometimes, act like I am not interested in making new friends. I do want to fix this habit, but it's really hard to fix.

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Hi Kane!

You are more of an introvert and there is nothing wrong with that. But being sociable can be a big advantage to you when you get older. :) Try doing it gradually. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

I can't get close to friends who are not close to me, and I, sometimes, act like I am not interested in making new friends. 
>>I can't get close to friends who are not close to me. I sometimes act like I am not interested in making new friends. 

I do want to fix this habit, but it's really hard to fix.
>> I want to fix this habit but it is really hard. 
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