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I will cite my new song that I am making. Recently, there was a very big disaster to Korea. There were lots of forests fire in Korea. People couldn't extinguish with just their effort. They always hope to be spring again, and they hope Spring Rain. So I am making the music which's title is Spring Again. Like it, it's good idea for composers about this situation. They can express their songs with the situation that they are in. We can make Minor song because of the situation of Ukraine. In conclusion, we can make song about this situation.

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Hello, Daniel! Thank you for doing your homework. Your answer is interesting. I can't wait to hear "Spring Again."

Please take note of the corrections. 

- Teacher Debbie

I will cite my new song that I am making. 
>> I would write a song about disasters.

Recently, there was a very big disaster to Korea. 
>> Recently, there was a very big disaster in Korea. 

There were lots of forests fire in Korea. 
>> There were lots of forest fires.

People couldn't extinguish with just their effort. They always hope to be spring again, and they hope Spring Rain. 
>> People couldn't extinguish the wildfires, so they hoped for spring and spring rain.

So I am making the music which's title is Spring Again. 
>>  Therefore, I would make a song entitled "Spring Again."

Like it, it's good idea for composers about this situation. 
>> Calamities like this can make composers think of music.

They can express their songs with the situation that they are in
>> They can express the situations they are in through songs.

We can make Minor song because of the situation of Ukraine. 
>> We can also make songs in minor keys dedicated to Ukraine.

In conclusion, we can make song about this situation.
>> In conclusion, we can make songs about catastrophes.
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