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Canada's house rent is very expensive.
I hate humid because my skin is atopic skin.
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Hello there, Ms. Kyu!

I hope that you can find a very convenient and comfortable home in Canada soon. Moreover, I hope that your skin allergy will not appear when you go there.

I think that your Hawaii travel was more memorable. Tell me more about it in class.

Thank you for these very good sentences and for your very good work.

See you in class!

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Canada's house rent is very expensive.
>>Correct!
Or: House rent in Canada is very expensive.

I hate humid because my skin is atopic skin.
>> I hate humid because my skin is an atopic skin.

My family went to the travel of Hawaii before Covid-19.
>>   My family went to travel to Hawaii before COVID-19.
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