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What is the most interesting hobby in your family?

작성자: 신*진
2022-03-16 903

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It is my brother who has the most intriguing hobby among my family members. He does love shopping clothes. None of my family members enjoy shopping except him. He usually go shopping to buy what he like to wear. For me, going out for buying clothes is one of the most bothering things to do. But he is the one who go other city to buy what he want to wear. On one hand, I can’t understand the way he behaves. It takes too much time to go other place for buying clothes. But on the other hand, it is one of the most productive hobbies. He can improve his appearance by wearing delicate clothes and also can resell what he wore. In some cases, there are some kinds of clothes whose price can be increased as time goes by. So my brother earn his own money by reselling his clothes. He did buy an i-phone with his own money. I feel proud of him. I think my brother’s hobby which is shopping clothes is the most interesting hobby among our family’s.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Sue! Your brother is both into fashion and business. You are right that it is really interesting. I hope you continue supporting him. See you!-Faith-
It is my brother who has the most intriguing hobby among my family members. 
>> CORRECT
He does love shopping clothes. 
>> CORRECT
OR He is into shopping.
None of my family members enjoy shopping except him.
>> None of my family members enjoys shopping except him.
He usually go shopping to buy what he like to wear.
>> He usually goes shopping to buy what he likes to wear.  
For me, going out for buying clothes is one of the most bothering things to do. 
>> CORRECT
But he is the one who go other city to buy what he want to wear. 
>> But he is the one who goes to other cities to buy what he wants to wear. 
On one hand, I can’t understand the way he behaves. 
>> CORRECT
OR On one hand, I still wonder about this lifestyle of him.
It takes too much time to go other place for buying clothes. 
>> It takes too much time to go to other places for buying clothes. 
But on the other hand, it is one of the most productive hobbies. 
>> But, I must say it is one of the most productive hobbies I know. 
He can improve his appearance by wearing delicate clothes and also can resell what he wore.
>> He can improve his appearance by wearing delicate clothes and also can resell what he has already worn.
In some cases, there are some kinds of clothes whose price can be increased as time goes by. 
>> In some cases, there are some kinds of clothes which prices can be increased as time goes by. 
OR In some cases, there are kinds of clothes that appreciate later on.
So my brother earn his own money by reselling his clothes. 
>> So, my brother earns his own money by reselling his clothes. 
He did buy an i-phone with his own money. 
>> He did buy an I-phone with his own money. 
I feel proud of him. 
>> CORRECT
I think my brother’s hobby which is shopping clothes is the most interesting hobby among our family’s.
>> I think my brother’s hobby which is shopping clothes is the most interesting hobby among the family’s.
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