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If you were a celebrity, what kind of movie would you like to do? Why?

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2022-03-17 986

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If I were a celebrity, I would like to do historic movie. I like watching historic movie. I like it's own atmosphere. In those kinds of movies, there are traditional backgrounds and fantasy which is imagined by the writers. They brings out the most attractive story. So If I were an actress, I would like to be those beautiful stories' component. And there are lots of charming costumes that cannot be seen in modern society. I would like to wear those kind of costumes too. Specially, in Korea, there are Korea's traditional clothes which is called 'Hanbok'. In modern society only in special days Korean can wear that. But, still those kinds of Hanbok is not real traditional clothes but changed for comfortableness. So I want to feel real tradition Hanbok and Hair style. It seems like really attractive experience. Furthermore there are lots of sad but beautiful story in Korean historical drama and movie. We call it 'Han' which means sad but beautiful feeling. I do love it, I want to act that.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Sue! I think you can portray that role well. I also like it when you show your patriotism towards your country. See you!-Faith-
If I were a celebrity, I would like to do historic movie. 
>> If I were a celebrity, I would like to do a historical movie. 
I like watching historic movie. 
>> I like watching historic movies. 
I like it's own atmosphere. 
>> I like its own atmosphere. 
In those kinds of movies, there are traditional backgrounds and fantasy which is imagined by the writers. 
>> In those kinds of movies, there are traditional backgrounds and fantasy which are imagined by the writers. 
They brings out the most attractive story. 
>> They bring out the most attractive story. 
So If I were an actress, I would like to be those beautiful stories' component. 
>> So, if I were an actress, I would like to be those beautiful stories' components. 
And there are lots of charming costumes that cannot be seen in modern society. 
>> In addition, there are lots of charming costumes that cannot be seen in modern society. 
I would like to wear those kind of costumes too. 
>> I would like to wear those kinds of costumes too. 
Specially, in Korea, there are Korea's traditional clothes which is called 'Hanbok'. 
>> Especially, in Korea, there is a type of traditional clothes which is called 'Hanbok'. 
In modern society only in special days Korean can wear that. 
>> In modern society, Koreans only wear that on special days.
But, still those kinds of Hanbok is not real traditional clothes but changed for comfortableness. 
>> But, still those kinds of Hanbok are not real traditional clothes because they were changed to be comfortable.
So I want to feel real tradition Hanbok and Hair style. 
>> So, I want to feel the real traditional Hanbok and hair style. 
It seems like really attractive experience. 
>> It seems like a really attractive experience. 
Furthermore there are lots of sad but beautiful story in Korean historical drama and movie. 
>> Furthermore, there are lots of sad but beautiful stores in Korean historical dramas and movies. 
We call it 'Han' which means sad but beautiful feeling. 
>> We call it 'Han' which means sad but a beautiful feeling. 
I do love it, I want to act that.
>> CORRECT
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