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No, don't think that people would be less human if they transplated animal's organs because it's just a part of internal organs and they aren't inplanted machines into their body. However, I don't pros to transplant foregin organs to humans due to difficulties getting data. Doctors must have paticipants who are willing to receive it, although it has countless harms. Humans can't be the experiment of subject, even though it gurentee us a bright future. If the government allows doctors to transplant the organs of animals, they would try it as many cases as possible because they hope getting a optimistic results as quickly as possible. It can be their acchievement as a doctor. Of course, it is quite difficult matters to get donors. It also has legal issues, for instance allowance of selling human organs. So, I think that we would better finding alternative such as artificial organs. I strongly believe that scientists can invent artificial organs and it is proved historically human has u

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

No, don't think that people would be less human if they transplated animal's organs because it's just a part of internal organs and they aren't inplanted machines into their body. 
>> No, don't think that people would be less human if they transplated animal's organs because it's just a part of internal organs and they aren't machines that are inplanted into their bodies. 
However, I don't pros to transplant foregin organs to humans due to difficulties getting data.
>> However, I don't see much of pros to transplant foreign organs to humans due to difficulties in getting data.
 Doctors must have paticipants who are willing to receive it, although it has countless harms.
>> CORRECT!
 Humans can't be the experiment of subject, even though it gurentee us a bright future. 
>>  Humans can't be the subjects for experiments, even though it guarantees us a bright future. 
OR >> Humans can't be experimental variables, even though it guarantees us a bright future. 
If the government allows doctors to transplant the organs of animals, they would try it as many cases as possible because they hope getting a optimistic results as quickly as possible. 
>> If the government allows doctors to transplant the organs of animals, they would try it as many cases as possible because they hope to get an optimistic result as quickly as possible. 
OR >>  If the government allows doctors to transplant the organs of animals, they would try it as many cases as possible because they hope to get optimistic results as quickly as possible. 
It can be their acchievement as a doctor. 
>> CORRECT!
Of course, it is quite difficult matters to get donors. 
>> Of course, it is quite a difficult matter to get donors. 
It also has legal issues, for instance allowance of selling human organs. 
>> It also has legal issues, for instance, allowing selling human organs. 
So, I think that we would better finding alternative such as artificial organs. 
>> So, I think it would be better to find alternatives such as artificial organs. 
I strongly believe that scientists can invent artificial organs and it is proved historically human has u
>> I strongly believe that scientists can invent artificial organs and it is proved historically.
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