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Do you want to change something in your appearance? Why or why not?

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I have to say It's "No". I'm satisfied in my appearance. You just tole me that I'm a jolly person. I think people like it because I can easily laugh. :)

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Hi Elic! 

Yes, we should be contented with what we have in life. Our appearance brings us character. It's our identity. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I have to say It's "No". 
>> I have to say it's "No". 

I'm satisfied in my appearance. 
>> CORRECT

You just tole me that I'm a jolly person. 
>> You told me that I'm a jolly person. 

I think people like it because I can easily laugh. :)
>> I think people like that about me because I laugh easily. 
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