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Do you want to change something in your appearance? Why or why not? Explain in detail.

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Yes, I do. I want to change my nose because my nose is not good on my face. I have a big mouth and medium eyes. My nose is medium, too. Instead of medium size of nose, I want to have a proper size of nose. I think that most people want to change a section of their face. I don't think these are serious problem. I just hope everyone, including me does thier best to love themselves.

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Hi Kimberly! 

Yes, we should be contented with what we have in life. Our appearance brings us character. It's our identity. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Yes, I do. 
>> CORRECT

I want to change my nose because my nose is not good on my face. 
>> I want to change my nose because it doesn't look good on my face. 

I have a big mouth and medium eyes. 
>> I have a big mouth and medium-sized eyes. 

My nose is medium, too. 
>> CORRECT

Instead of medium size of nose, I want to have a proper size of nose. 
>> Instead of having a medium-sized of nose, I want to have a normal-sized one. 

I think that most people want to change a section of their face. 
>> CORRECT

I don't think these are serious problem. 
>> I don't think these are serious problems. 

I just hope everyone, including me does thier best to love themselves.
>> I just hope everyone, including me, will do their best to love themselves.

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