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Do you want to change something in your appearance? Why or why not? Explain in detail.

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I don't want to change anything in my appearance yet, but I'm worrying about my height.
I'm tall at my age, but I can't sure that I will grow more later.
So I'm worrying about my height.
But I don't care about it that much, and I think I will grow more.

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Hi John! 

Yes, we should be contented with what we have in life. Our appearance brings us character. It's our identity. 

PS: I think your height will become taller as time goes by. You're still young anyway. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't want to change anything in my appearance yet, but I'm worrying about my height.
>> I don't want to change anything in my appearance but I am a little bit worries about my height. 

I'm tall at my age, but I can't sure that I will grow more later.
>> I am tall for my age now but I am not sure if I will grow much taller. 

So I'm worrying about my height.
>> This is why I worry about my height. 

But I don't care about it that much, and I think I will grow more.
>> Although, I don't care about it that much and I think that I will still grow taller. 
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