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HOMEWORK:
What should your government do about your problem of an old age society? Share your answer in a few sentences.

According to news, the population has been decreasing since 2020. The government keeps pay attention to old people in order to solve the difficult problem.

It seem to be an error in my feedback. Some of feedbacks is same sentences. Could you check this? Thank you.

I hope your arthritis gets better soon. Have a meaningful day too. Donna!

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Hello there, Hae Ju!

First of all, my apologies again for the same feedback on your sentences. They have been  rectified on your page. Here they are as well: 

1. Yeah, I'm back to work from last Friday.
>> Correct!
>> Yeah, I have been back to work since last Friday.

4. Good point is I go to the Pilates today.
>> The good (point/ thing) is I will go to Pilates today.

6. I really want to travel the world with ship.
>> Correct!
Or:  I really want to travel the world with a ship.

7. Recently, I watched the YouTube.
>> Recently, I watched YouTube.

I am not sure why I missed to check so many sentences today but I promise to  never commit the same mistakes again. 

Anyway, my foot is absolutely alright now! Like magic, it disappeared!

Meanwhile, here on your answer, I agree with you that the older people need to be convinced that they can have children and the government will support them. Thank you very much for your time in reading your sentences on your page. I hope that the grammar suggestions can help you in one way or another to memorize grammar patterns.

Take care and see you again on Friday!

Good night! ^^

-T. Donna =)

According to news, the population has been decreasing since 2020. 
>> Correct!

The government keeps pay attention to old people in order to solve the difficult problem.
>> The government should keep paying attention to old people in order to solve the difficult problem.

It seem to be an error in my feedback. Some of feedbacks is same sentences. 
>>  There seems to be an error in my feedback. Some of the feedbacks are the same sentences. 

Could you check this? Thank you.
>> Correct!

I hope your arthritis gets better soon. Have a meaningful day too. Donna!
>> Correct!


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