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Which one is better, studying abroad or studying in South Korea? Explain your answer.

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If I want to study English, then I think studying abroad is better than studying in South Korea.
The purpose of studying English is trying to talk with foreigners comfortably.
And the best way to talk with foreigners comfortably is going to the country.
So if I want to study English more deeply, then I would go to U.S to study it.

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Hi John! 

This is true. Usually the reason varies. It depends on your goal because it has some advantages and disadvantages. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I want to study English, then I think studying abroad is better than studying in South Korea.
>> CORRECT

The purpose of studying English is trying to talk with foreigners comfortably.
>> CORRECT

And the best way to talk with foreigners comfortably is going to the country.
>> And the best way to talk with foreigners comfortably is going to the country wherein they speak that language. 

So if I want to study English more deeply, then I would go to U.S to study it.
>> So if I want to study English more deeply, then I would go to U.S to study it.

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