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If you could edit your memories, which ones would you erase and why?

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I don't want to erase my memories.
Even tough there are some bad memories, and sad memories, the memories are memories.
We may think that bad memories are just useless things, but we can learn many things from bad memories.
We can feel more emotions and even we can empathize other people well.
Because of these reasons, I think all of my memories are meaningful memories to me.

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Hi John! 

There are usually reasons behind why certain things happen in our life. There is always a purpose for it.  We just need to realize it. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't want to erase my memories.
>> CORRECT

Even tough there are some bad memories, and sad memories, the memories are memories.
>> Even though some of them are bad or sad, the memories are still memories.

We may think that bad memories are just useless things, but we can learn many things from bad memories.
>> We may think that bad memories are useless , but we can learn many things from them. 

We can feel more emotions and even we can empathize other people well.
>> We can feel more emotions and even we can feel empathy towards other people as well. 

Because of these reasons, I think all of my memories are meaningful memories to me.
>> Because of these reasons, I think all of my memories are meaningful to me.

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