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What can you say about the increasing number of teenage felons with no criminal responsibility?

This is very serious, cause these young criminal who didn't learn any lessons will repeat the same trouble.
Nowadays because of the supply of Internet, people can easily get the knowledge of law, those teenage felons as well. There're must some felons abuse the law to avoid a responsibility. I think the number of teenage felons increasing because they don't afraid of the law. The society have responsibility to teach them how to reflect, not just forgive them and give a chance without any price.

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Hi there Jane!
I definitely agreed with your point.  I think it is high time to change the age of responsibility. What do you think? At what age should a teenage felon be responsible for the crime he/she has committed?
Thanks for sharing!
Aki~
This is very serious, cause these young criminals who didn't learn any lessons will repeat the same trouble.
>>> Correct!
Nowadays because of the supply of Internet, people can easily get the knowledge of law, those teenage felons as well. 
>>> Nowadays because of the supply of the internet, people can easily get knowledge of the law, those teenage felons as well. 
There're must some felons abuse the law to avoid a responsibility. I think the number of teenage felons increasing because they don't afraid of the law.
>>>There're must some felons who abuse the law to avoid responsibility. I think the number of teenage felons increasing because they don't afraid of the law.
The society have responsibility to teach them how to reflect, not just forgive them and give a chance without any price.
>>> Society has the responsibility to teach them how to reflect, not just forgive them and give them a chance without any price.
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