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My best TV show

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My favorite best TV show is found the miss person.
When I was born before, Korea during in the war.
So now Korea is two country.
One of Korea suddenly separate by force
One of North Korea and South Korea.
So many people lost family by force.
And a long time later.
The goverment they started a broadcast to find separated families.

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Hi Ann! 

Wow. That sounds like a great show. I am now curious about it. I will look it up and watch it myself. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My favorite best TV show is found the miss person.
>> The best TV show for me is "Find the missing person".

When I was born before, Korea during in the war.
>> When I was born, there was a war in Korea. 

So now Korea is two country.
>> Now, Korea is divided into two. 

One of Korea suddenly separate by force
>> One side of Korea was suddenly separated by force. 

One of North Korea and South Korea.
>> There was North and South Korea. 

So many people lost family by force.
>> Many people lost their family because of this. 

And a long time later.
>> As time goes by, the government started to make a broadcast to find the people who were separated from  their family. 

The goverment they started a broadcast to find separated families.
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