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I would listen to baby shark because this song is for kids so I can listen it with my family, and also it is addictive so I think I can listen it all day long.

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Hi Alex! 

I used to listen to that song too when I take care of my nephew. It's very addictive. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I would listen to baby shark because this song is for kids 
>>  I would listen to the song "Baby Shark" because it is a song for kids. 

so I can listen it with my family, and also it is addictive so I think I can listen it all day long.
>> I can listen to it with my family and it is also addictive. This is why I can listen to it all day. 
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