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What do you think is the best TV show and why?

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In my opinion, the best TV show is a news.
Thanks for a news, we are able to get the information about nowadays situations.
Also we can have a right thought about something by debating each other base on the information.
Even a news could save a person's life.
A news could give the information very quickly, so it could save the people who are in danger.
Because of these reasons, I think the best TV show is a news.

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Hi John! 

This is true. TV news programs are very reliable. They can give us updates about current events. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my opinion, the best TV show is a news.
>> In my opinion, the best TV shows are news programs. 

Thanks for a news, we are able to get the information about nowadays situations.
>> Thanks to news, we are able to get information about current events. 

Also we can have a right thought about something by debating each other base on the information.
>> Also, we can get facts about something by debating with each other based on the information shown on the news. 

Even a news could save a person's life.
>> This can even save people's lives. 

A news could give the information very quickly, so it could save the people who are in danger.
>> News could give information very quickly, so it could save the people who are in danger.

Because of these reasons, I think the best TV show is a news.
>> Because of these reasons, I think the best TV shows are new programs. 

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