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Handsome is best hahaha

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There are some brunch restaurant near by at my home.
That restaurant have very good serve.
It's a buffet style brunch cafe.
And most important thing is every part time jobber they are handsome.
Of course, the food is good too, but especially when I look at them.
I feel so very comfortable:)

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Hi Ann! 

You made me laugh as I was reading your answer. Great choice! Hahaha! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

There are some brunch restaurant near by at my home.
>> There are some brunch restaurants nearby  my home.

That restaurant have very good serve.
>> They serve good food there. 

It's a buffet style brunch cafe.
>> CORRECT

And most important thing is every part time jobber they are handsome.
>> The most important thing is that the part timers there are handsome. 

Of course, the food is good too, but especially when I look at them.
>> Of course, the food is good too, but it becomes better when I look at them. 

I feel so very comfortable:)
>> I feel so comfortable there. :) 

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