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Do you think there is still inequality between men and women there in South Korea? Explain your answ

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In my opinion, the discrimination between men and women is still remaining in South Korea.
I think it's not that serious, but there is clearly big and small discrimination in here.
But I think this discrimination will be disappeared because of nowadays educations.
We are learning about the value of each gender, and also the equality of men and women.
Also there is no any big prejudice in my school and other schools.
So I think it is getting better in here, and also we have to educate about it more seriously.

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Hi John! 

Inequality is never okay. There shouldn't be any boundaries or limitations on what a man or a woman can and can't do. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my opinion, the discrimination between men and women is still remaining in South Korea.
>> In my opinion, the discrimination between men and women is still on going in South Korea.

I think it's not that serious, but there is clearly big and small discrimination in here.
>> I think it's not that serious, but there's still obvious discrimination here. 

But I think this discrimination will be disappeared because of nowadays educations.
>> But I think this kind of discrimination will disappear because of nowadays education. 

We are learning about the value of each gender, and also the equality of men and women.
>> CORRECT

Also there is no any big prejudice in my school and other schools.
Also, there are no big prejudices in my school and other schools so I think the situation is getting better now. 

So I think it is getting better in here, and also we have to educate about it more seriously
>> We also need to educate people about this more seriously. 
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