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Are you afraid of getting old? Why or why not?

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Of course, I'm afraid as getting old now. When I was young at student of middle and high school, I wanted to become an adult soon. But when I became an adult at early 20s, I realized that time flies. So I won't waste of my time and use it well.

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Hi Elic! 

Yes, we need to value our time always. We're not getting any younger these days so we should enjoy life as much as we can. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Of course, I'm afraid as getting old now. 
>>Of course, I'm afraid getting old now. 

When I was young at student of middle and high school, I wanted to become an adult soon. 
>> When I was young, I wanted to become an adult already. 

But when I became an adult at early 20s, I realized that time flies. 
>> But when I became an adult, during my early 20s, I realized that time flies. 

So I won't waste of my time and use it well.
>> This is why I won't waste my time and use it well.
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