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What do you think is the most serious problem in the world? Why do you think so?

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I think the climate crisis is the most serious problem in the world.
If it happens, many animals will be died and many people will be died.
So we have to protect the Earth.
If we do that, the Earth will be okay.
I hope we can live safely.

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Hello Yeon Hu! 
I agree with you! It really is a serious problem that people should try and solve. Good job on the composition! See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I think the climate crisis is the most serious problem in the world.
>>CORRECT!
If it happens, many animals will be died and many people will be died.
>>If it happens, many animals and people will die.
So we have to protect the Earth.
>>CORRECT!
If we do that, the Earth will be okay.
>>CORRECT!
I hope we can live safely.
>>CORRECT!
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