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Why I think homework is important

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I think homework is important.
That is because we can learn something when we do homework.
My second reason is that when we don't do homework, we can have punishments for the teacher.
My third reason is that when we do homework well, parents will compliment me.
Finally, homework is necessary to do.

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Hi, Joey! Thank you so much for doing your homework. You made good sentences tonight. Keep it up! 

- Teacher Debbie

I think homework is important.
>> This is a good sentence.

That is because we can learn something when we do homework.
>> This is a good sentence.

My second reason is that when we don't do homework, we can have punishments for the teacher. 
My third reason is that when we do homework well, parents will compliment me.
>>  When we do homework, our parents will compliment us. However, when we don't, our teachers will give us punishment. 

Finally, homework is necessary to do.
>> In conclusion, homework is necessary to do.
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