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Why I like the stars more than the sun.

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I like the stars more than the sun.
That is because the stars are bigger than the sun
My second reason is that the stars have high temperatures than the sun.
My third reason is, that the star's color is very varied.
Finally, the star can make more bright light than the sun.

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 Your homework is well-organized and easy to understand, Joey. Superb! However, you have to focus on degrees of adjectives.


- Teacher Debbie


I like the stars more than the sun.
>> This is a good sentence.

That is because the stars are bigger than the sun.
>>  This is a good sentence.

My second reason is that the stars have high temperatures than the sun.
>> Moreover, the stars are hotter than the sun.

My third reason is, that the star's color is very varied.
>>  They have various colors, too.

Finally, the star can make more bright light than the sun.
>> They are also shinier than the sun.
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