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What is your opinion about people who have tattoos? Would you personally want to have one? Why or why not.

I wouldn't want to have one. I don't like have tattoos on my body but I don't care other people's tattoos. It is just an expression of themselves. But it is very sore to remove tattoos, so we have to make a careful decision.

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Hi Won! 

People's opinions about this is always different. Either way, we still need to respect people who have tattoos the same on how we treat others who don't. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I wouldn't want to have one. 
>> CORRECT

I don't like have tattoos on my body but I don't care other people's tattoos. 
>> I don't like having tattoos on my body but I don't care if other's want to. 

It is just an expression of themselves. 
>> CORRECT

But it is very sore to remove tattoos, so we have to make a careful decision.
>> But it is very painful to remove tattoos, so we have to make a careful decision.

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