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Should sports be always competitive?

Not always. Compete can motivate people to do it harder and better, so can help improving the skills. But most important thing on sports is 'fun'. So people shouldn't lose joy and manner while doing it.

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Good morning Jane!
Thank you for your response on your homework
You are right, Competition on sports motivates each person and it now depends how do they carry the responsibility of winning and losing because this is where you can see whether the person really had fun while doing that sport.
Take care!
Aki~
Not always. Compete can motivate people to do it harder and better, so can help improving the skills.
>>> Not always. Competition can motivate people to do it harder and better, so it can help improve their skills.
>>> Not always. Competing with someone can motivate people to do it harder and better, so it can help improve their skills.
But most important thing on sports is 'fun'. 
>>> But the most important thing about sports is 'fun
So people shouldn't lose joy and manner while doing it. 
>>> Correct!
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